Finally got time to sit down with this.
The big "red flag" I see is that she can tell a person's personality just by observing them and seems to automatically know when they're lying. That seems to approach "god mode" to me. People often present themselves a certain way (their demeanor) though they may actually be quite different. IE, a very brutal person may affect a very cultured manner, for example. In theory they would eventually slip up, but immediately pegging someone as a liar/fraud seems a bit over-the-top to me.
I like that she needs a task to focus on or else creates chaos out of boredom. I wonder if you'll be able to roleplay all her mental issues successfully...it seems that with that many, it could be a challenge to make her feel like a cohesive person. I get that she's manic and by nature will be mercurial...I'm just trying to think of possible pitfalls. I'm also not sure why anyone would willingly work with/associate with her, lol, since she seems both unstable AND cruel.
Actually, I'm kind of a grammar nazi but you do exceptionally well on that front.Thanks for posting! And do hope my critique comes across as positive. I do mean to be helpful.



Thanks for posting! And do hope my critique comes across as positive. I do mean to be helpful.

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). So I can totally see how she can be useful, in a group like Whispers of Chaos she found her place. And she is cruel but she is not clueless, she won't be openly sadistic, she is, after all a master of deception and always finds a way to indulge her pleasures without other people bothering her.

